I woke up. I touched my head. All the pain had gone and left me with a scar. A red scar. Could the it be magical? I don’t know, but now I have no one left with me . Alone by myself. Left alone on the side of the road. But what if I was in charge of the world? I could just do anything i want. But now it only me left. Suddenly there were two men towering over me with a giant bag - it was moving and sounds were escaping from it. I knew that they wanted to trap me...
By Mighty (Y5)
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Mrs Clare
3/16/2018 03:10:18 pm
Hi Mighty, I like the way you have used short sentences and questions to grab the readers attention. You do a great job of telling your reader what your character is thinking but how are they feeling? Are they scared? are they excited by the freedom they have? Some good dramatic ideas for a story.
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